In class, we spoke about developing a paragraph using examples. We looked at a page from the University of North Carolina that explains the development of a paragraph using exaples.
http://www.unc.edu/depts/wcweb/handouts/paragraphs.html#6
You actually wrote the paragraph (or started to write it) in class.
Remember, this is what I asked for:
- Topic sentence (1 sentence). This sentence tells the reader the main point of the paragraph
- Explain the topic sentences (1 or 2 sentences).
- An example. Use the words “For Example,…” to start this example. (1 – 2 sentences)
- Explain your example. (2 sentences)
- Another example. Use the words “Another example of…” to start your second example.
- Explain your second example.
- Conclusion (1 – 2 sentences)
Now I would like you to post your paragraph to this blog.
Write your paragraph in MA Word and cut and paste as a “comment.” All of you should complete this assignment before our next class on Nov. 10.
Thank you. I look forward to ALL of us reading your paragraphs!
Many people are unaware of the people they are hurting when they are over intoxicated. Most people think they are only affecting themselves, when infact they are endangering everyone around them. For example, a drunk driver ripped a family apart, while he only sprained his wrist. He repeatedly told the police he did nothing wrong. The driver was so wasted he didnt realize he had gotten behind the wheel. His decision to keep drinking caused him to murder a mother and hospitalize 2 of her 5 children. Another example is an alcoholic father who physically and emotionally abuses his wife and children on a daily basis. When over intoxicated he becomes very angry which causes him to beat his wife and scream at his kids. The perception of the more you drink the better you feel is not true. Over intoxication is the cause of many murders, broken families and ruined lives.
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Gisel Castillo Reply:
November 14th, 2010 at 11:31 pm
@Quentisa Wright, i agree wit what your saying being intoxicated can lead to nothing good, in fact it has no beneficial to the body unless its red wine
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Richard Lozano Reply:
November 15th, 2010 at 1:07 am
@Quentisa Wright, I don’t think these people are unaware of the consequences being over intoxicated can bring. In today’s world one cannot claim ignorance in many of societies issues, this being one. You can’t even watch TV without catching a liquor commercial asking you to “Drink responsibly”. Reckless, selfish and over indulgent seems to describe them better than unaware since being “unaware” may imply a certain level of innocence.
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shanea crosby Reply:
November 15th, 2010 at 9:45 am
@Quentisa Wright, i toatlly agree to people are drinking and hurting others in their path.This well written!
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Being put on the spot sucks. When someone is put on the spot it becomes very uncomfortable and it makes the person nervous. When someone is put on the spot they don’t have enough time develop a well organized thought. For example Mr. Blanco my English teacher, said to write a paragraph point about any topic we choose, and if we can’t think about anything to use our book. Mr. Blanco has put everyone in the class on the spot. By Mr. Blanco doing so, he has potentially made some people uncomfortable or nervous because they probably can’t think of anything from the top of their head. Another example of being put on the spot is when I went to a reggae concert and I was pulled out the crowd onto the stage to dance along with the band. I was very nervous because I was standing on stage in front of a crowd of strangers. Being put on the spot in that case turned out to be fun. I learned that being put on the spot can make me nervous and sometimes uncomfortable, but it also can turn into a great expierence.
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tia jackson Reply:
November 15th, 2010 at 10:50 am
@Jenny Normil
LMBO!!! OMG, that is so true Jenny! Being put on the spot is so uncomfortable for me, being that I’m a shy person by nature. It was really funny how you put Mr. Blanco on blast for putting you on the spot! Revenge is sweet! ( sorry Mr. Blanco ) What dance did you do when they pulled you on stage at the concert?
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Water is the most important substance for human beings to survive. The planet Earth is composed by three fourths of water, but only one third of it is potable, which means that water saving is essential for us to live. Water waste make us vulnerable, that’s why some groups of conscientious individuals are constantly making campaigns to spread this need around the world. Some of us, don’t think in the consequences of our actions can bring, for example, when we brush our teeth and leave the water tap open we’re unconsciously wasting more than 2 gallons per minute, water that someone else in the world can be needing, because not everybody have the same possibilities that we enjoy, some people have to travel long distances to get a half-full bucket of water. Another example is when turning on and running a sprinkler system too long, which allows excess of water that cannot be absorbed quickly by our dry desert soil to flow off private property. Giving too much water to the plants in our garden doesn’t mean that they are going to grow stronger, they just satisfy themselves with what they need, and the rest goes to water waste. And if we just pay attention to this little details, we would contribute more with our society and with the environment, just think about it for a second and don’t miss the opportunity to GO GREEN!
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Texting while driving has become the number one cause of road accidents. It is a dangerous habit and very distracting. Individuals that text while driving are more likely to miss a stop sign, swerve in and out of traffic into the opposite lane and cause an accident. For example, some people think they can text without looking at their phones, and they may think its safe, but it’s not. These individuals are more focused on what they are saying in the text message, than what’s going on in the road. Another example is when people are in the receiving side of a text message and they decided its ok to read the message while driving; this is just as fatal as writing a text. For every two seconds that a driver has their eyes off the road to read a text, they are twice as likely to have an accident. Texting while driving takes one thing away, it takes your vision and focus off the road. Texting while driving is one of the most irresponsible acts someone operating a motor vehicle can do. It is irresponsible to allow your actions to possibly cause an emergency situation when it could have been avoided by simply doing the responsible thing and waiting until the appropriate time and place.
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Jonathan Juliao Reply:
November 15th, 2010 at 12:20 am
@Jorge Quintero, You’re absolutely right Jorge and I feel the problem is not getting any better. There have been people that have died just for texting or let alone being distracted with their cell phones period. I have one friend who rear-ended a girl; the girl was driving on the turnpike and dropped her phone. The girl took her eyes off the road and was reaching for her phone! When boom, my friend hit her. But guess who got the ticket and who was at fault? My friend because of Florida’s Rear-End Fault Law. People really need to be more considerate and responsible like you said because if not they’re not only hurting others but they’re also hurting themselves.
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MArliette ROdriguez Reply:
November 15th, 2010 at 10:47 am
@Jorge Quintero, I’m totally agree with you because texting while driving is one of the main causes of traffic accidents, by doing it you’re not only putting in danger the people that travel with you but the ones around you in the road that don’t have fault of your actions.
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Students are unaware that that going to college early is more wise. Students who go to college at the right age and time are more academically knowledged. Ones who work better and faster achieve degrees at an earlier rate. Unlike adults who wait later in life, early students have the stamina or energy needed. For example, there is excess time for study and remembereance. An adult who starts later in life may have a family, and needs to tend to other home priorities. Even work hours may be a high consumption of time for an adult; however, a student or young adult, only has the time to look after his or herself.
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Jorge Quintero Reply:
November 11th, 2010 at 9:48 am
@Jeffrey Howard,Jeffrey, you’re right, young students should go to college ASAP. However, there are millions of adult students that successfully return to college to obtain a degree; but like you said the time and commitment needed to complete a degree program and balance the responsibilities of an adult can be a challenge. The good news is going back to college has never been easier. Many colleges and universities offer re-entry student services and campus childcare centers, and flexible course scheduling with classes one night per week, on the weekends or online. Ultimately, if you want to return to school for whatever reason, being an older student shouldn’t be a deterrent.
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My name has always been a bother to me. I’ve always wondered why the name Walter was given to me. Maybe it was to embarrass me whenever someone heard my name. For example, in elementary school I always hated roll call. I hated how the whole classroom stared at me when they witnessed a Hispanic boy answer rather than a white boy. It made me feel like my name wasn’t Hispanic enough. It made me feel weird because my name didn’t match me. Another example of my name causing embarrassment was when I took a trip to Mexico to meet my stepfather’s family. When everyone heard my name, they immediately were reminded of Walter Mercado. He is a famous astrologist amongst the Hispanic crowd who is rather feminine. It was embarrassing to be the reminder of a gay astrologist by my name. A traditional Hispanic name like Jose would’ve lessened the embarrassment and nervousness I endured.
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BIANCHI ROSARIO Reply:
November 14th, 2010 at 9:24 pm
@Walter Posada, your totally right about everything..but if it still bugs you then maybe you can change your name or just be proud of what your parents named you! 🙂
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Zuleima Gomez Reply:
November 15th, 2010 at 10:06 am
@Walter Posada, Like you I always wonder why my mother chose to give me such an ugly name. Of course I never really told her I hated my name. Growing up I thought I would get teased because of my name, but to my surprise a lot of people actually liked it. Even then I wish I had another name like Samantha or Natalie. As I got older I learned to love my name and I realized that my name isn’t the one that makes me who I am, but that I give meaning to my name. Without ones personality a name is simply a name.
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Many rock’n’roll guitarists prefer the sound of Marshall amplifiers. These amps produce an aggressive, distorted tone that cuts through the mix and sustains for days. Because of these tonal characteristics, several famous guitarists have chosen Marshall throughout the years. For example, the sweet, singing solos of Jimi Hendrix were played through a Marshall. These amplifiers were a perfect match for his style of music. He even had Marshall design an amplifier specifically for him because the previous model was not loud enough! Another example of their use is AC/DC’s Angus Young. His hard-hitting and aggressive tone is a result of these amps. Today, they manufacture an Angus Young signature series amplifier dedicated to his faithful use of Marshalls during his career. The list of artists is endless. Marshall amplifiers are the definitive tone of rock’n’roll guitar.
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All families should eat dinner together because it promotes balance in their children’s lives as well as personality. Parents should sit down with their children regardless of age and eat at the dinner table. For example, in my house, we’ve always made it a point to eat together with the TV turned off, because that’s where we all get a chance to catch up. Everyone’s busy doing different things and no one has the time for each other during the day so the dinner table provides us with an escape for family time, or time for ourselves, as a family. Another example of why families should eat together is because it aids in molding an adolescents personality. My parents would speak to me and my sister about events that happened on the news; one day, a teen killed someone because he was being bullied and my parents told us that we should defend others being teased. Since that talk at the dinner table, I’ve always tried to be the voice of reason in all situations, not just bullying. I will definitely continue this tradition of eating family dinners with my children.
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Clive Lindo Reply:
November 15th, 2010 at 7:35 am
@Stefany Barzaga, This is an excellent topic. Many homes should encourage the idea that eating dinner at a dinner table together can relieve stress that has been going on throughout the week. The trust between parent and child will then begin to grow and ensure that their is someone to always talk to. I really love the idea of this topic stefany i just wish many people will still use it. Great Job
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The worst stage in one’s life is being humiliated in front of others. We should try to be more gracious before putting someone in an awkward situation. The feeling of embarrassment is just horrific, and especially when it seems like the whole world is there at that given time. For example, when six-year old Franklin innocently takes a candy from a convenient store, his mother disciplines him, and forces him to apologize to the manager. That will be an event that Franklin will never forget because he was mortified in front of everyone that day. Another example is when I was in kindergarten and we had a little party, I forgot to bring in something but nonetheless there was sufficient food. My teacher offered to the entire classroom refills and when it was my turn she abruptly asked me what I brought in, and then asked if I thought it was fair to receive a drink even though I did’nt bring anything. I never forgot that day and I use that experience to make sure I am not the cause for the humiliation in someone’s life. Nothing can cure this stage in our life; we can only try to not let it happen because we all know how awful it can be.
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Jenny Normil Reply:
November 15th, 2010 at 1:29 am
@Jonathan Juliao, I agree with your posting. Being embarassed is very hard as i talked about in my posting. It’s always easier watching someone getting embarrassed but its not easy to be the one getting embarrassed.
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Going away for college can help you grow and be independent. You may learn how to take care of responsibility and learn how to live in the “grown up world” for example my cousin Natalie went away for college and she has Independence herself because she’s too far to run to mom and ask for help. Another example is when one of my old school classmate came to visit, she had done everything on her own with the help of no one, she did all her shopping on her own, paid her own bills, ran everything in her house etc. Growing up is the process of being independent. To top it all going away for college is a great way to be independent and to learn things on your own.
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Karina Toirac Reply:
November 16th, 2010 at 3:51 pm
@BIANCHI ROSARIO, I completely agree. Although I did not go away for college, most of my friends did and after speaking to them recently, I can tell they have matured so much. They tell me all their stories and I am amazed at how well they are all surviving. I’m only 18 and I still can’t live without my parents haha
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Walter Posada Reply:
November 16th, 2010 at 9:12 pm
@BIANCHI ROSARIO,
You make a very valid point. When one is alone they have no choice but to spread their wings and fly on their own. I sometimes question my decision in choosing a school close to home. I wonder if I will be ready for the real world once I finish my studies. As scary as it may be, sooner or later we have to tackle the challenge that is the real world on our own. Even though mommy may be too far to run away technology has advanced to the point where money can be wired to you almost instantly. It never hurts to have a safety =)
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There has been little proof that the war on drugs has made any impact on curtailing the trafficking of narcotics or the violence associated with drug cartels. Despite the billions of dollars spent over the last decade, the epidemic has not diminished. While many resources are going towards guarding our borders from smugglers, cartels are finding more creative ways of distributing their product. For example, growing and hiding Marijuana crops in plain sight using state parks and residencies in gated communities. The level of violence between rival gangs has become increasingly alarming. For example, most recently 20 people were killed in a Mexican border city. The incident was due to local gangs fighting over turf. It’s evident that we need to take a step back and consider a different approach to this so called “war”.
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Having a part time job, in the assembly line at an automotive plant, will make you understand EDUCATION as the key word to succeed in life. Waking up every single day during the summer, to go to work for supporting my self and saving some money to spend later in books and other supplies that I will need for school, is not my favorite thing to do; nevertheless, I have acquired, by going to get higher education in college, to make real the idea of I want a better job and paid. For example, these working conditions at the plant, noisy and hot, have taught me that I do not want to stay there for the rest of my life; even though safety is an important rule that they take in account at anytime. I believe that tough background will affect me. Another example of my statement will be the people that have spent thirty years with the company (entry level position), and never have gotten promoted, because they never went back to college for a better education. These guys are used to working a lot of extra hours to make extra money, instead of spending extra time on getting a diploma, so better position, and more money. It would result in making more money in less working hours. Working in a place that I do not like and seen people stocked there have inspired me to make the most of my college years, before entering to real world for a full time job. I believe in Education; it will take me as high as I pretend to be.
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Thanksgiving is that time of year where everyone is happy. Love, warmth, and the inclusion of family fill your heart with the gratitude of being thankful in some way. Thanksgiving should be celebrated more than once a year because of what it does for families around this time. For example traveling families come around to a specific home where we conversate, play, and partake in a meal together as one big happy family. Another example of what this day has to bring for us is the opportunity to catch up and keep the family as a whole for generations to come. This same tradition should be custom throughout the family to keep the family solid in showing what love is all about. We all should have something to be thankful for in life if you’re still living. For those who have passed away we should thank them for the opportunity and experiences they have taught us in life.
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Stefany Barzaga Reply:
November 12th, 2010 at 8:44 am
@Clive Lindo,
Good paragraph. It’s true that the majority of families only get together for holidays such as Thanksgiving. It’s a shame, because we should really come together more often. Also, if people are like me, they don’t think too often about what they have and should be grateful for. It seems like every day of the year we think of the things we don’t have and Thanksgiving is the only day we’re grateful for what we do have. So good paragraph, it brought to light that I should be more grateful for what I have as well as the people in my life.
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The Montessori method of learning gives students a head start in education. A child enrolled in a montessori school uses all five senses to learn. For example, when learning to spell, he or she not only writes the letters, they feel them. The child touches the letters, made of sandpaper, feeling the shapes and curves of each one. The montessori method also uses the a-ba-ca board, verses the traditional abc’s, which focuses on the sounds of the letters, not just the memorization of them. Our minds relate the feeling and sounds making spelling and reading less challenging. Another example of the Montessori method of learning is while doing math, the child not only sees the numbers, they physically touch and count, move and place. This makes addition and subtraction real and visible, engraving it in the mind. As humans, our brains are stimulated and conditioned by movement; therefore, this method of learning makes information less complicated and easier to retain. The montessori method of learning gives the child the tools and skills not only to learn, but to maintain the information for a lifetime.
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Rodolfo Diaz Pino Reply:
November 11th, 2010 at 7:04 pm
@Kelly McCabe, I agree with It. The Montessori method, which is based on the experiences of an Italian physician and educator Maria Montessori (1870–1952), is to duplicate the experimental observation of children to hold, and support their true natural way of being. Teacher’s role of observation will be very important; thereby, teachers have to be very well prepared for applying these experimental interactions with children.
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Our minds are being captivated by material things. The youth spends so much money on things they think they need. They think these material things are needed because they see others with it. They start to think well why cant i have it? For example, when we go out places and everyone has on their best outfits. We see the different accessories and want it. Our wants easily become s a need and we work extra to save up and get it. Another example, the television is full of show about celebrities that have it all. The youth see how much people glorify them for there material things and want them. We want what they have so we begin ti try and get it. Our world is full of materialistic things. The youth thinks they need material things but they really just want it.
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Candido Bonilla Reply:
November 14th, 2010 at 8:09 pm
@Gisel Castillo, your right youth now in days all they think about is how to attract others with materialistic things. like when they see a new outfit or a new pair of shoes that bearly came out they know they must have it. many have a different pair of shoes for every different outfit they got. I remember how back in the days one pair shoe was enough for a whole year. But i guess youth has a new style now, and if they have the money why not have it?
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Emotional maltreatment is part of child abuse, but it is often a secret. This happens because people don’t know how to recognize the signs of several types of child abuse. For example, people focus more on physical abuse. Do to the shocking scars and bruises it leaves. Until people see these results is when they decide to take action. Another example is that people aren’t aware of the different types of abuse there are. Such as physical abuse, child neglect, sexual abuse, and emotional maltreatment. Do to such ignorance by the people of today emotional maltreatment is getting by without punishment.
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Teen girls are pursuing pregnancy for the wrong reasons. They are unaware of the time, funding and patience it will take to raise a child. These issues are among many more that teen girls tend to ignore to please themselves .For example in a survey teen moms were asked several questions, one of which was; What made you decide to become a mom? The majority of these teens replied in order to fix their relationship with their significant other. There on staging pregnancies believing they will help keep their relationship together and make them stronger. Another example is teen girls feeling the need to have some control over the other person whom they either are or were involved with. Reason being is because they have not yet accepted that the other person has moved on, therefore they become pregnant. This gives them a sense of security. Now they have a child they feel as if the other person will always be obligated to them in some type of way. Also that they will forever be able to see this person and even spend quality time with them because of the child they share together. They wrongly believe this in cases like this, having a child doesn’t work; it neither controls nor help fix a relationship, but yet drives further apart. Some teen moms even attempt suicide feeling unwanted and down about themselves. In conclusion teens are wrongly becoming pregnant and should consider the facts before pursuing pregnancy.
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Quentisa Wright Reply:
November 10th, 2010 at 5:35 pm
@Shanea Crosby, Well said well said, very sad but true many girls think and feel this way. I personally know of a girl (age 16 at the time) specifically got pregnant just to keep her boyfriend. Her parents kicked her out so she moved in with her boyfriend and his family. Previous events proved that she got pregnant on purpose but when she gave birth to a beautiful baby girl all hard feelings was forgotten. To make a long story short a couple of months after her daughter was born her true feelings started to show. She refused to cook, clean and even take care of the baby. (couple months after she turned 18) When her daughter was a year and a half she decided to leave her boyfriend for another man. Not only did she leave the baby’s father but she also left her baby and moved to another state. Many of these young teenage girls only live for the moment. They are not thinking about the future and consequences of their actions. In this case, when the teenage mother purposley became pregnant she was not thinking that her feelings for her boyfriend would change. It is inevitable now that she had a baby for all the wrong reasonings and now that she is done with her boyfriend she is done with her baby. It is very sad that her baby girl is now being punished and growing up without her mother. Even worst to know that her mother never really wanted her and left (her to move on with her life) for another man in another state.
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Remembering where we came form is very important in today’s society. With such a diverse culture its nice that people still speak theyr countries tounge, as long as its not disrespectful to someone around who may not understand. For example, if your ever sitting at a restaurant, take about a minute and listen to people around you. A family may be talking in spanish and as soon as the waiter comes they kindly switch over to english. this shows that they can give respect while still remembering theyr roots as a family. Another example would have to be today’s television. People acknowledge the fact that this culture varies a great deal and they do theyr best to provide television that is suitable for everyone. Even though were in america everything isn’t always english all the time, and its important that people remember where they came from, in order to know where theyr going.
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@Kelly McCabe, I agree with It. The Montessori method, which is based on the experiences of an Italian physician and educator Maria Montessori (1870–1952), is to duplicate the experimental observation of children to hold, and support their true natural way of being. Teacher’s role of observation will be very important; thereby, teachers have to be very well prepared for applying these experimental interactions with children.
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@Stefany Barzaga, I strongly agree! Growing up my family and I always had supper together, with the tv off! It was our time to catch up with each other, and enjoy one another. I feel there is a connection made within families that eat together. I now have supper with my son, the same way.
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Many people are unaware of the effects of drinking and driving or they just choose to ignore them. Some say when they’re in the moment of drinking at a party or any event, they feel like they are sober enough to drive after they have drank. The familiar words of “I am okay to drive” can be deadly. For example, the leading cause of deaths in the U.S is due to automobile accidents. Most of those accidents are caused my drunk drivers who once said “I am okay to drive.” Another effect of drinking and driving is being at risk of receiving a DUI. These days, Policemen are everywhere, trying to prevent any potential accidents from happening. Being stopped for something as stupid as a DUI can have many consequences for your driving privileges. Next time when you decide to drink, think twice before getting behind the wheel.
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Sometimes i feel as if i’m put in bad situations. Things i would have no control over. For example, my computer teacher giving me an “F” on something i did on my own,but she thinks i copied from somewhere. After explaining to her that i did it all by myself, she refused to believe me and kept the “F”. Another example would be haveing to choose between two friends, or possibly a boyfriend. Your friends, or boyfriend feel as if they should come first, and then that’s where drama starts,and you really have no control over anything. So being put in bad situations weather it being a accusing teacher or bittering friends, can always come to you wether or not you want confrontation.
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